
When I was young, I lived not far from sea.
Though out of sight, I always knew which way
to left, to right, to front or back it lay,
my mind’s own compass in uncertainty.
When first we loved, in my naivety
I nearly drowned. Stranded in disarray
on rocks above your withdrawn tide I lay,
and thought you rightly had abandoned me.
And yet, through all these years, you’ve been my sea.
Though rarely seen, and mostly far away,
you’ve been the one place that I knew would stay
always my still calm point, my constancy.
But how I wish I could make time reverse,
And enter that blue sea, that glittering heat.
A man this time – not boy!- who could traverse
with sure strong strokes the waters, salt yet sweet,
and thus, now worthy of your love, immerse
myself forever in your mystic deep.

| I wanted this to be a sonnet, because it’s a structure that suits a reflective, contemplative subject. However, sonnets (I’ve come to believe) can’t carry more than two or three ideas, especially if those ideas are to be expressed elegantly. As others have said, a sonnet is a coin with two sides. Try as I might, I could not fit what I wanted to say to ‘Sophie’ into the standard fourteen lines. So I gave it the stretch limo treatment: A Petrarchan sonnet, but with an extra quatrain stuffed into the middle. A cheat, but I can’t see that it does any harm. |






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